Hello-Gamsat Section 2 help!

Hello! GAMSAT section II help! I have had many personal issues which meant that I was unable to put as much time into this section; until now. Would it be okay for someone to have a quick look at my essay and give advice on its structure and content etc? I'd really appreciate it 'If poverty is the mother of crime, stupidity is its father.' 'Crime' is a complex matter that has many types and causes, so it would be unfair to simply say that poverty and stupidity give birth to all crimes. The comment suggests that the root causes of crime are poverty and stupidity. However, not all crimes are committed purely to acquire money, some have causes such as: greed, vanity and mental illness. Similarly, saying that stupidity is a co-producer of crime is fairly untrue. Certain criminals maybe considered to lack intelligence for carrying out petty crimes that have long term negative effects, but there are some who are considered 'Masterminds' for the way the crime has been carried out and so forth. On the other hand, the recent economic decline has brought an increased financial pressure on individuals, which has lead to increased burglaries and robberies. In this ever advancing and fast-paced technological age, society and media have painted a picture where success and possession of the latest gadgets and car models goes hand in hand. It is in the human nature to have the desire to be successful, so regardless of social class boundaries it is safe to say that all humans want to a...
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