Can someone look over this email I'm sending to a professor I would like to do research with?

Hello Professor Walsh, My name is ------ and I am an undergraduate student at Boston University studying Behavior and Health. I am in my junior year and am looking to gain research experience this summer studying my foremost interest in psychology. that being the prodromal phase of schizophrenia. I am fascinated by psychosis and would like to investigate both the chemical changes in the brain that occur prior to the first episode, and the observable changes in personality. My goal is to... Can someone look over this email I'm sending to a professor I would like to do research with?
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